Vliar Excerpt

 Here is an excerpt from my "Airilie" novel. This is probably one of the most visceral things I've ever written. Comments and thoughts?      

"Suddenly he thrust forth and was atop Flynn, who was kicking and screaming – begging. But there was a ripping sound, and suddenly he was silenced and the entrails of his throat were displaced and thrown aside. Mad with an unexpected rage that shot up from the very core, Vliar couldn’t stop himself as he continued to tear at the helpless man – a man that had now become a corpse. And there it was, after digging and scooping and dirtying his hands with crimson, his prize, the curse and affliction that was his plague: the heart. The hunger he had quelled for what seemed like an eternity burst from his stomach upwards until he was salivating. Was this why he had kept hearing the heartbeat? It seemed so natural, so instinctive to eviscerate this body and retrieve the life-giving organ. It was nourishment for the soul – no, he had no soul now; it was nourishment for the body and the body only.  And as he ate it, quashed the meat in his mouth, ecstasy like a star burst rushed through his body as though it was the blood he no longer had coursing through his veins. He felt alive.

 Corpron stood there, too shocked to move. He wanted desperately to pull out his sword, restore balance, order to the scene before him, but such primal blood-lust froze him with fear.

And then Vliar, too, looked down upon the body – his victim – and the primal instinct embedded within his brain was replaced with reasoning. His eyes widened. Horror pulsed through him, replacing the ecstasy. His hands were coated with sweltering red guilt. He cowered away from the body on all fours, sliding to the corner of the room. Rocking back and forth, he muttered strange syllables, the likes Corpron had never heard before. And then something coherent: “Save me, Corpron. I don’t know what’s happening to me.”

But it was all too late, for then Corpron became the next victim in a string of unforgivable transformations and deaths that tore away at the very foundations of humanity."